Imma give it some crit if thats OK: the melody of that lfo synth sounds a bit incoherent, considering the part that starts at
0:17
, that has something going, I really like it. Next thing id point out is the rave-ish synth you used there, I wouldnt say that it doesnt fit or that its bad, however, it has a bit too much energy for the other elements and it could need a bit of mixing. Id recommend trying to work on some transitional elements, swelling or some filter work, it is a bit tricky.