Well it is very good. I would change some things but it is very good. I would try to make shorter the intro and on the middel of the song when you change the rythm i I try to put the introduction to the chorus making the introduction out background
no problem we'r not in a hurry...i like the intro too and the first part althought i think that the last one need some revision for drum and perc...today i run out of idea quite fast,i have to extend it and make another part