i'm a fan of the main chords u got going, however i think it's been pointed out before but the percussion is too quick over it, the triple kick rolls are good but i feel they don't fit (again this isn't hate im just specifying the pacing should match each other) good way to do it if you struggle is turn on the metronome and stay in time with that.
you've got the essentials going but now i'd focus on your basses and synthwork. it can be scary at first but keep trying and you'll learn overtime