The bass blows out a little too intensely, causing the effect to lose some of its punch. Think about finding a way to give it that effect without losing that grit.
The waveform looks quite small, if you put more power into it, I think you could hear the hidden parts. I have a question, what is the reverb connected to? is that the master output, or?
That is a little better, there's more nuance to it while still keeping some power. I think you might be able to take it even further, not sure how though