That intro is pretty great for a starter, but the drop portion could use a bit of work. The snare feels quiet compared to the kick. The whole arrangement of the drop is pretty confusing. The excessive drum hits and switch from chords to basses are a bit difficult to keep up with. I'm not sure
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works. I like your sound design, but what kills it is the arrangement of the two drops. The second drop is a bit easier to follow, but it could do better with a little less drum hits