nice work man! yeah I'd fade the melody in, and get a nice beat to to come in with the sidechaining, and add some bass and a few other pads, but if you finish this, post the end product on my wall thanks :-)
ok start at 0 volume and come up slowly with this melody ...then find or make a cool beat and blend it in all at once of fade it in...then add other pads or instrumnents - maybe a lead...just try shit your creative mind compels you to and then let's hear it :D