it's a really neat concept but i have some problems with it:
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the drums are a little too whacky for me to follow even though i do enjoy offbeat stuff.
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the harmonic clarity at
00:42
goes completely out the window and it's an interesting effect but you might want to have it be a bit more grounded if you get what i mean.
the synths all feel a little raw/unfinished. i was focusing too much on the synths as opposed to the composition and musical ideas should always come before synths imo
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finally it's too short. there's so much potential with this piece and it sounds like you just gave up 20% of the way through! please elaborate on what you've got because this could be a great full piece.