with the lyrical content of the song i feel like you want to be more emotive, but for some rsn you're holding yourself back. it results in a monotone, indifferent delivery that doesnt sell the desperation of needing this person back. when you go up into your sweeter register it's rlly nice, i'd stay up there for longer. you don't need to be belting notes but i think you'd benefit from singing "in character" more if that makes sense!!
there's some awkward moments here and there imo, but i think they effectively communicate the emotions you're trying to. i think you're on the right track
I love your voice, the song, and the lyrics—they’re so raw and genuinely emotional, no frills, just real and stripped down. And honestly, that’s perfect. But with your talent, I’d suggest experimenting with different versions where you play around with more variations. The ideal balance might be coming back to this version or maybe a mix of pieces from all the different takes. Either way, amazing work, bro <3!