Very good, I look forward to hearing what you do next. Also, I think you were going for a dance track with this one... if that is indeed the case, it is commonplace for there to be a kick on every beat of a dance track. Otherwise, I really enjoyed it.
i say, its great for a first song...my only complaint would be the samples and that part in
1.55
, could use a volume fix so it doesnt jut out so suddenly, although that might be good... :\