I'd just suggest that you make the 808/kick more simple then having two consecutive hits; like try 1--1--1 (1=hit). Also, this is just my preference, but I think you should have another brass maybe playing long notes at a lower octave and make a pattern with the hi-hats. I'm really liking your snare roll at
0:08
and the hi-hat rolls. These are just suggestions... Keep going bro!