It woks as a great base (and possibly even intro), yet it lacks much of a melody, thus making it rather... plain. Finally, it is rather long and drawn out; there aren't enough transitions.
If you were to add a harmony over it (maybe even some vocals), it could sound much better.
i had to come back to this one! you may not know, but i have listened to about 5/6ths of your music...thats like 3 million-bagillion-million-billion songs!!! whats genius about this track is that high resonant sound at
0:20
...it sounds very high in resonance but it doesnt hurt my ears! awesome work! :)
Wow, this is perfect. The detuning on that high synth and the repeitiveness of the bass and the way the track slowly changes over time is so cool. Awesome track :)