Hmm, I like
1:40
. I think you might work on the balance of different voices and focus on how things are harmonized. Each voice is doing something interesting harmonically, but they are all doing something different so it doesn't feel very cohesive.
its actually not bad its got a nice melody. nice bass. the beat is pretty on point. some body who is really into chill would really like this. and im one of those guys. but Im the one that listens really closely to chill songs lol