Wow, it's strange that this one didn't get as much attention as the other since it's a lot nicer. As far as critique goes, the reverb at the end makes me suspect the whole thing has really metallic reverb. You might want to choose a different setting on whatever plugin you're using for reverb. That will help you have an even cleaner sound than you're getting already.
Thanks man. The reverb was a hassle to perfect on this, it was a bit metallic however I spent so much time on it that I ended up giving up :p thanks though man.