sounds kinda awkward tbh. even outside of the meh sound design, the actual structure of the drop is just odd. the long notes are already kinda weird but then they start to have little breaks and even with the delay it just sounds clunky. not to shit on it cuz i know it's not a super serious track but yeah.
I mean you CAN potentially salvage it. You would just have to commit to longer notes and be strategic where to place the shorter notes later in the drop. It's a flow i've done a couple times at least.