I am a sucker for piano some times when we experiment it blows up and damages our pride. other times its like discovering a new flavor of Ice cream that cures cancer aids and leprosy while getting you high and laid with no side eff ex and coming down is the best part :) because you get to eat pie :) great experiment. keep working with it i think perspective has a point it seams unfinished a little bit
I feel like you have a good starting point with this. The only thing I would recommend would be layering multiple melodies to give it more depth. And also being a little creative with adding different beats throughout the track. And since you were wondering, I'm a guy ;)