This isn't bad at all tbh. There's a synth that's obviously louder than the rest and it sounds like it doesn't fit well with the others. I'd say mess with volume and/or mixing. But yeah, this isn't half bad. The second breakdown is great in concept. It just needs some mixing. You have good melodies and a nice grasp of basic percussion. Just beyond the horizon of this track lies an outright bop. :)