First of all, the beginning there are way too many frequencies at the same level so everything sounds mushed. I think you have like white noise or something following that kick and it sounds so out of place, white noise should only be used as an ambience filler, never should be front and center in a mix. I am not a big fan of the melody because I feel it is super random but that might just be me. Also that transition lead between the buildup and the drop seems way out of tune.
That bass is not getting any favors done in the drop but it might be a nice sound if brought out properly. All in all this one needs work but it has a gd direction once if would get refined.