Yea uhm
This needs work in my opinion
coming from my angle, This is poorly mixed, and it seems that no effects were used, so it sounds dry, i mean, you could add reverb with some detune and give the bass more feel and texture
but idk
The plucks do need effects too, i would add some Chorus, Detune, And ect.
Yea, on my opinion, this sounds like something someone new to audiotool would make