just a lil' electronic music project i started after getting inspired by a jam session i had a few months ago with a close friend of mine XD
vocals and the guitars are sung/played by me, and i wrote the lyrics as well
~ lyrics ~
[INTRO]
i've figure out
what you're doin'
keeping me around
so you'll stay amused
[HOOK]
you're not breaking my heart again
i'm not letting you get that close
you may strip down to your skin
but i'm keeping on my clothes
[RAP]
some say we paint this picture we see
on the white blank canvas of reality
that we're the authors of this book called life
we write a page in it everyday
if that's true then why does it seem
like everyone else can change the scene
into an outcome you never intended
you keep it simple but it gets complicated
a clash of wills with everyone
trying to make their life go how they want
i never wanted for us to end
but you insisted it's for the best
apprehensive i walked away
but now you say you want me to stay?
love's not a puzzle and it's not a game
white or black but i don't do grey
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Omg i LOVE 01:24 THAT RAP PART!!!
The name escapes me but this reminds me of an artist i used to avidly listen to back in the day and they had the same style and voice!
Im sure you know what im talking about but just wanna say fantastic job there. That part is so solid
It appeals to the poet in me because there's so much thought you have to put into the flow and delivery of the lines. And if you can get it down, it can really add a special kind of flair to a track. Especially in EDM
THANK YOU! I don't do much rapping, but it's fun. I have only one other song I've written on guitar where I rap while I'm playing
Those chords in the begging sound off, i like the rhythm but i think you need to add another note to the top of that chord, it sounds a bit flat amd the vocals too on some parts. I wish i was a vocalist so i could offer real constructive feedback but i have none atm so i shall just point it out and leave the rest to you
Yeah this is one of the ones I wanna revamp. During the time I wrote this song, I had completely rewritten the 1st verse, changed some lines in the chorus, reworked the rap lyics a bit and done a bunch of shit with the guitarist in my band.
I had plans to fully re-track the vocals, improve the song structure, and go all out. But I haven't revisited the draft in nearly a year to really begin implementing those changes. It might be the next thing I do tbh, because it has a lot of potential
Republished
Added vocals & electric guitars, refined the transitions, extended the intro, and did a heck ton of EQing/mastering
hol up wait this is sick
chorus is fire
Republished
a peck of mastering and a bushel of fine-tuning; changed intro, added a new synth, yadda yadda
Nice one !
