This could be alot better but I like the idea. The 808 is way too loud and is drowns out the rest of the song. I would love if the 808 had more of a rhythm and if the song had a nice beat that would go along with the 808. Other than that this is some good framework for what could be a really nice track :)
for a skeleton track its good, i just feel that the 808 is drowning out the piano. on another note if you intended for that to happen then it turned out really well, good job. hope to hear more of your work.